He'd intended to say Byleth's handwriting wasn't half as rough as some of his men, who came by literacy well into adulthood, but he did have thoughts on the stories themselves. ]
I know that you're angling for something specific — I get that sense, at least. [ Something he'd like to experience for himself, at least in some of those stories. Byleth had written so much. ] But your information comes from books, yeah? I had a look at some of those too, and I'd say they skew things. For one, some of the sex scenes would just be painful if not injurious, rather than a good time.
[ But the part Byleth cared about most was the emotional intimacy, wasn't it? He'd spoken of that before. ]
I don't exactly have experience with romance, myself. Not the genuine kind, at any rate.
[ Some of the parts that felt like an odd clash between learned portrayals and genuine yearning stood out to him. Or maybe it was simply his past speaking... After lapsing into a brief and ruminative silence, he shook his head. ]
I think you're a solid writer, but you could use more to draw from. It might help you feel out what you really want to say.
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He'd intended to say Byleth's handwriting wasn't half as rough as some of his men, who came by literacy well into adulthood, but he did have thoughts on the stories themselves. ]
I know that you're angling for something specific — I get that sense, at least. [ Something he'd like to experience for himself, at least in some of those stories. Byleth had written so much. ] But your information comes from books, yeah? I had a look at some of those too, and I'd say they skew things. For one, some of the sex scenes would just be painful if not injurious, rather than a good time.
[ But the part Byleth cared about most was the emotional intimacy, wasn't it? He'd spoken of that before. ]
I don't exactly have experience with romance, myself. Not the genuine kind, at any rate.
[ Some of the parts that felt like an odd clash between learned portrayals and genuine yearning stood out to him. Or maybe it was simply his past speaking... After lapsing into a brief and ruminative silence, he shook his head. ]
I think you're a solid writer, but you could use more to draw from. It might help you feel out what you really want to say.